Content: I had a hard time reading your diary, to be perfectly honest. There were a few reasons why. 1.) You like to...trail off...and leave periods everywhere...it’s really annoying...It’s fine sometimes, I do it in my own diary from time to time. But when every paragraph and every sentence is chalk full of them, it’s really irksome. 2.) There don’t seem to be any coherent thoughts in your diary, at least none that I could find. Everything was one big whimsical metaphor. That’s poetic, creative, artistic, whatever. But no one else can understand it but you. That’s great for a personal diary, but when you are having your diary reviewed it probably isn’t a good thing if the reviewer has no idea as to what you are talking about, no idea as to what brought on those emotions/metaphors/thoughts.
I started reading at the very beginning of your diary (or end, as you say), but after a few entries I found myself skimming listlessly. So, I switched gears and went to the most recent entry and worked my way as far back as I could stomach, which was about fifty or so entries. In the beginning of your diary, you used the annoying internet lingo, “ppls.” Thank the lord you stopped in your later entries, or who knows what I might have done. Actually, besides the whole “ppls” thing, I like the older entries of your diary better than the new. They seem to have actual meaning, and they aren’t quite so metaphorical all the time. Regardless, I found it difficult to really get into your writing in past or present entries.
You do make some good points, and you do give some good advice. You just seem to be stuck in a world that isn’t real. Then again, perhaps you are just unlucky because I dislike metaphors being used in strong abundance. Metaphors though they are, you have a good show of emotion to back them up. That’s notable in and of itself and makes up for the “...” somewhat.[30/45]
Layout: A rather simple layout by Unique Designs. I like the layout, or at least I would, except for the fact that nothing really matches up. The banner and the entries/navigation are rather lopsided, and maybe they’re meant to be that way, but it started to leave me feeling disoriented after awhile. I like the “Brilliant and Ridiculous” aspect, and your opposite-themed navigation menu was unique. The only real beef I have with the layout is, of course, the lack of uniformity when it comes to centering. Maybe I’m just too picky.[16/20]
Mechanics:Overall, your mechanics weren’t bad. You make spelling errors every now and then, and you’re a little comma-happy. I would suggest writing your entires in Microsoft Word before posting them to take care of those.[8/10]
Extras:You have a cast, although it doesn’t make much sense and I didn’t see many of those names actually mentioned anywhere in your writing. Then again, I didn’t read every entry, so I won’t dock for that. You also had quizzes, advice, fun sites, etc.[10/10]
Contact: Guestbook and notes. Good thing I don’t want to stalk you.[3/5]
Navigation: The opposites were a little hard to get used to, but it was fairly simple getting from one place to the next.[5/5]
Link:Yep. You linked us. You even used my favorite (and now only) button.[5/5]
Favorite Quote: “I don't know what it is about you, but there's something... and it interests me...” I don’t know. It was just kind of a nifty thing to say.
Favorite Entry: This one. The chain analogy I like, it’s interesting.
Return Trips?: Probably not. Sorry, I just couldn’t really find myself interested enough in your musings.
Final Comments: You have a pretty good diary, overall. I’m sure others find it astounding, and I could see why. I’m just not a big fan of metaphors or of poetry, and that’s basically what your diary is composed of.
Total: [77/100]
Reviewed by: Tory
